27 February 2015

Once

Today I have a little poem for you all, and it was inspired by a fantasy middle-school/young adult novel series that I am writing and have been working on since the fifth grade. I haven't finished the series yet, and some days I get really discouraged to the point that I want to drop the idea, but perhaps someday it may stir in me once again the feeling I had when I had first laid eyes on this world whose story has got to be told.

One of the things that you should know about my characters in this working series is that they are middle schoolers living this fancy perfect life. They are given these heavy adult responsibilities that they really aren't prepared to take on, and the actions cause these negative consequences which does end up leaving them scarred. Take it as a "broken fairy tale", where there isn't a happily ever after. All of the violence in the poem is metaphorically stated; I do not mean the literal thing.  


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Once a protagonist.
A fire.
Naïve, brave, fresh, and bright. Hope anew.
Setting off on the unknown journey where adventures unfold.

Stab, stab!
The sword slices, the deep cuts of blood
red and full.
Wounds may heal, but oh!
Where has the protagonist gone?

Crying, screaming, kicking, awaking, haunted,
as friends cling on desperately,
trying to stop the hero from

falling
  into
  an
         abyss.
Lives failed to save,
The cunning words of an enemy
twiddling the craft of its needlework beneath the surface,
memories that are nightmares.
All of these stoned into the afflicted soul.

Ashes, ashes, ashes, ashes,
for what is there left to remain?
The great crumbled by vile-hearted savages
who take on a life when fed.
And this is all that is left
of a hero young and naïve,
once.

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Watch out for March! My muse has been on fire lately, whoop! I may not be able to post a lot due to my schedule, but I am, however, writing a mini story which I am excited to share with you all! It was a painful piece to write because the character is really heavy in terms of persona and I could really sympathize with the character. Please leave some feedback on the poem! I'd love to hear it. xx

43 comments:

  1. Oh my! That's so beautiful. You've got me so curious now.
    I know what you mean about working on the same project for years. It's really discouraging, isn't it?! But let me tell you, it's worth it when you finally start to make progress.

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    1. Thank you Kat! Yes, it's so hard to keep working the project-- but I am trying. Taking on a writing life is difficult and we have to be thick-skinned.

      xoxo Morning

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  2. One thing that is happening ever since I've been blogging is that my sense of poetry has improved a bit, I can if not find the hidden meaning atleast understand what the poem is about :)
    I like your poem :D
    it's really interesting
    Can't wait for your short story
    I think you should add your signature or something after the poem :)

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    1. Well, I add my signature at the end of the post, so it would be awkward right after the poem, but you're right! Blogging does help with writing.

      xoxo Morning

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  3. this is a great poem! DO NOT be discouraged! this is why I have never finished writing a book even though I have probably tried like 100 times! you are too good for that :)

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    1. Thank you, When she writes! I'm not the best writer in the world, but I've got to be persistent.

      xoxo Morning

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  4. Gosh, this is so amazing. Keep writing, keep writing, keep writing! Hold on and keep rocking your muse, I know how it's like to be writing a book, I'm in the middle of writing a trilogy at the moment!

    hannie | chapters like this

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    1. Thank you, Hannie! I will, I will, I will! My muse is amazing right now; I hope it doesn't go away anytime soon, because it's been on vacation for way too long! Good luck with your trilogy!

      xoxo Morning

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  5. Oh wow, you've been working on a series since fifth grade! You are dedicated. Much more so than me.

    Cool poem. Very adventure-fairytale-y. Post some of your novel! I'm sure everyone would love to read it.

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    1. Thanks, Ella! I'd love to post some of my novel, but my drafts are all buried in my room, and it takes awhile to reach them... I'll try to make it a thing, though, posting novel excerpts!

      xoxo Morning

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  6. Oh I love this so much <3
    I can't wait to see your mini story! :)

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    1. Thanks, Lauren! I'm excited too! Eeep! XD

      xoxo Morning

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  7. OH. MY!!! That was wonderful, Morning! I would really love to see more of this! :D

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    1. Thanks, Clara! The poem is stand-alone; it only gets it's inspiration from my novel. :DDD

      xoxo Morning

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  8. BEAUTIFUL!!! YOU SHOULD WRITE MORE POETRY!

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    1. THANK YOU VERY MUCH OAKSTAR! I SHOULD BUT POETRY IS HARD! I'LL TRY! XD

      xoxo Morning

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  9. Oh gosh, this poem is so good! It is so interesting. I couldn't tear my eyes away!

    I write poetry too, but it's probably not as good as this. Maybe you could check it out? Maybe leave a little comment? Thanks!
    www.blindeyesoftheworld.blogspot.com

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    1. Hey! Yes, I would love to go and check out your blog! ^.^ I'll do that once I'm done replying to everyone's comments!

      xoxo Morning

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  10. I really like this! Don't give up on your dreams!

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    1. Yes! Never give up on dreams! Glad you liked it!

      xoxo Morning

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  11. WhaaTTTTT.

    Oh my gosh.

    It's perfection.

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    1. Thank you very much! It's rather flawed and needs to be edited, but... ♥

      xoxo Morning

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  12. Very nice work! You have a lovely way with imagery, and I quite liked the "falling into an abyss" stanza - the formatting is unique and certainly draws the eye. Can't wait to read the short story, as well. x

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    1. Thank you, Topaz! I originally wrote it like that, and I was really eager to write down that particular stanza on my laptop. :)

      xoxo Morning

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  13. I LOVE your blog! I just found it and it is amazing! My blog is maddysdigitaldiary.wordpress.com and I started a group blog not long ago girlslivingforgodsglory.wordpress I hope that you'll leave a comment letting me know that you were there and maybe even follow!

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    1. Hi, Maddy! I'll go and check out your blog! It'd be an honor to!

      xoxo Morning

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  14. Morning, your writing is simply amazing. The way you place words is stunning, the way you shape a picture before my eyes with them is breathtaking. Don't waste your talent! <3
    x Cloudy Dreams

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    1. I really don't want my talent to go to waste! >.< I really think my writing is rather rubbish at times but I really love that people can feel something from it. ^.^

      xoxo Morning

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  15. I LOVE ITTTTTTTTTTT. SCREAM. <3 <3 <3

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    1. AHHHHHHHHH!!!! :D THANK YOU. <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3

      xoxo Morning

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  16. AMAZING. This was simply beautiful, and your way with words is stunning. Keep it up :)

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    1. Thanks, Autumn, for the encouragement! I wish my prose would develop much more, but I'm trying.

      xoxo Morning

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  17. Sad, but very thought-provoking. Life can be hard sometimes, but the Lord sees us through. Nice job on the poetry, Morning.

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    1. Thank you, Bethany. The Lord does pull us through.

      xoxo Morning

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  18. I love how the words in the middle fall into an abyss and echo the meaning of the words. I have a soft spot for concrete poetry. The repetition is also a lovely touch. Nice work!

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    1. Thank you! :) I'm quite happy how this poem turned out, though I think I could have done a much better job.

      xoxo Morning

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  19. Man! Why are you soooo good at writing? No fair! Xxx

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    1. I don't know how! Words just come out and I think and then ---- ack!

      xoxo Morning

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    2. I wish I was as good as you! My teachers say I am but I could never be as good as you! Xxx

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    3. Writing takes time and practice. I started when I was in fifth grade, but from then my writing in sixth grade -- the quality of it -- went down real fast, and I had to take writing workshops and attend open mics to get back on track. And though I know how embarrassing it is when teachers start raving about your writing (I posted about it some time ago) their words do hold some truth to it. I have faith that you're going to be a great writer, too! ^.^

      xoxo Morning

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    4. Thank you so much! I have faith that you can do something with writing when you are older! Or if you don't want to write when you're older, I have faith that you'll be anything you want! Xx

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  20. That was such an emotional poem. Really well-written! Exceptional Job!!!

    Chiara xo

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